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"Communion With Tomorrow" orchestral track

Discussion in 'Critique & Feedback' started by Kaan Akalin, Mar 9, 2020.

  1. #1 Kaan Akalin, Mar 9, 2020
    Last edited: Mar 29, 2020
    UPDATE: here is the new version. Thanks for listening and for any critiques!

    Updated version:



    Hi,

    I just finished this piece. Would love you hear any feedback you might have about what's working for you and what's not as I strive to improve.

    Thanks!

    Original version:

     
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  2. #2 Doug Gibson, Mar 9, 2020
    Start out more simple. Both in terms of the motif, and the orchestration. You begin so thick, it doesn't really have anywhere to build to.

    The descending Bb-A-F-C to Ab-G-C (23 seconds) has promise, but it sort of shoots by us.

    As before, I hear echoes of Thomas Newman. Look at his "pacing"

     
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  3. #3 Kaan Akalin, Mar 9, 2020
    These are good points, Doug. Thank you! I’ll definitely keep this in mind as I keep at it.

    Thanks again,
     
  4. #4 Kaan Akalin, Mar 15, 2020
    Here is version 2 of this song that incorporates a lot of the feedback I received from vi control as well as Doug Gibson's suggestions to re-evaluate structure and pacing. Please have a listen and let me know if this works any better.

    Thanks so much!

    NEW VERSION:
     
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  5. #5 Michael Lückgen, Mar 15, 2020
    Hey Kaan,

    I like this song. Sounds a lot like Thomas Newman as Doug said already, but I really like that.

    It kept my interest throughout, so I think that is a good sign.

    When I compare your two version with another I have the feeling that the new intro got a bit long, but it works very good to get you into the vibe of the song.
     
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  6. #6 Kaan Akalin, Mar 16, 2020
    Thanks, Michael! I’m glad to hear your comments and appreciate your thoughts and impressions. It’s all helpful. Yes, Thomas Newman’s music hits me emotionally unlike anyone else’s, so I’m a huge fan of his.

    Thanks for listening!
     
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  7. #7 Sascha Wübbena, Mar 16, 2020
    Last edited: Mar 17, 2020
    Wow, I love this song. Thanks for sharing!
    The short theme is awesome! And the rest pushed my curiosity. It's very nebulous and thrilling. I would love to hear the whole soundtrack ;)
     
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  8. #8 Kaan Akalin, Mar 17, 2020
    Thanks so much, Sascha! That’s very encouraging to hear. Glad you liked it and thanks for posting your response to it.
     
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