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"Communion With Tomorrow" orchestral track

Discussion in 'Critique & Feedback' started by Kaan Akalin, Mar 9, 2020.

  1. #1 Kaan Akalin, Mar 9, 2020
    Last edited: Mar 29, 2020 at 1:54 PM
    UPDATE: here is the new version. Thanks for listening and for any critiques!

    Updated version:



    Hi,

    I just finished this piece. Would love you hear any feedback you might have about what's working for you and what's not as I strive to improve.

    Thanks!

    Original version:

     
  2. Start out more simple. Both in terms of the motif, and the orchestration. You begin so thick, it doesn't really have anywhere to build to.

    The descending Bb-A-F-C to Ab-G-C (23 seconds) has promise, but it sort of shoots by us.

    As before, I hear echoes of Thomas Newman. Look at his "pacing"

     
  3. These are good points, Doug. Thank you! I’ll definitely keep this in mind as I keep at it.

    Thanks again,
     
  4. Here is version 2 of this song that incorporates a lot of the feedback I received from vi control as well as Doug Gibson's suggestions to re-evaluate structure and pacing. Please have a listen and let me know if this works any better.

    Thanks so much!

    NEW VERSION:
     
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  5. Hey Kaan,

    I like this song. Sounds a lot like Thomas Newman as Doug said already, but I really like that.

    It kept my interest throughout, so I think that is a good sign.

    When I compare your two version with another I have the feeling that the new intro got a bit long, but it works very good to get you into the vibe of the song.
     
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  6. Thanks, Michael! I’m glad to hear your comments and appreciate your thoughts and impressions. It’s all helpful. Yes, Thomas Newman’s music hits me emotionally unlike anyone else’s, so I’m a huge fan of his.

    Thanks for listening!
     
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  7. #7 Sascha Wübbena, Mar 16, 2020
    Last edited: Mar 17, 2020
    Wow, I love this song. Thanks for sharing!
    The short theme is awesome! And the rest pushed my curiosity. It's very nebulous and thrilling. I would love to hear the whole soundtrack ;)
     
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  8. Thanks so much, Sascha! That’s very encouraging to hear. Glad you liked it and thanks for posting your response to it.
     

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