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Discussion in 'Critique & Feedback' started by Jure Jerebic, Sep 13, 2020.

  1. Hi,

    You know what this is. Feedback?

     
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  2. Great stuff, man!

    A couple comments...

    Around the start of the second phrase, I get some weirdness with the timings of the background parts. I wonder if it's some moving line that isn't coming through completely. I think any contrasting parts you have in it can definitely come up.

    it's a nice little AABA. Maybe do some melodic variation in the A sections, since this is a song that everyone knows exceedingly well, I don't know that it's necessary to do three full statements of the theme with no melodic variation. There are some good harmonic variations going on behind it every once in a while, but it bogs down because it's so familiar.

    Your big brass part at the end... some sample issues sounding MIDI, but beyond that balance-wise, the whole brass part is getting overshadowed by the string parts. That's not something that would happen in a real orchestra, so maybe think about bringing the brass up so it has a little more dynamic range overall.

    Really good stuff though! I like the vibe at the beginning, lots of good orchestration happening.
     

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