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Critique-ready

Discussion in 'Critique & Feedback' started by Stefanos Arz, Jan 13, 2020 at 5:39 PM.

  1. Kiran's Determination


     
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  2. Really good job I really like how you use the idea in the introduction throughout the piece however it might help with a second idea as well to help to keep the interest in the piece. I know that there is a second idea somewhere in the piece but it feels like too little time was spend on it.
    Something I notice in around the 1-minute mark the orchestration sounds a bit thin I think if hear correctly it because of too many octaves. Using too many octaves doesn't really add a strong harmony since its the same tone. Maybe it could use some open voice chords or counterpoint that doesn't hit the octave that much. Or it might be I think its the viola that repeats the same note I feel like it doesn't get much support. Otherwise, I think you did a fantastic job. It's really great to see that you spend more time developing an idea longer sometimes the composer doesn't spend enough time with their idea and move on too quickly. And I think you were really good at using the strings effectively most of the time.
     

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