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Well done! I couldn't write something like that, so I doubt I can provide much usefull feedback, but my impression is that you're moving in the right direction! I listened to your other piece again. For that one I wasn't really sure what to say about it and since @Doug Gibson was going to give you some feedback that you for sure will get out more of than from mine, I skipped commenting on that one. Sorry about that. I thought the main melodic motif was too monotone in the rythm to be used as an "anchor of familiarity" for the amount of time that you did in the beginning. I would have wanted that to be developed into something new sooner and overall I had a feel of "I'm not sure where we're going with this piece". Nothing stood out to me as "wrong", but I felt it lacked a clear direction/arc, like a story that isn't told in an ideal way, so it becomes hard to follow. Mike has a good class about that topic, it is called "structure" I think.

I feel like your new piece works a lot better for me personally. You are developing your first melodic motif sooner and for me in a more satisfying way. On the first listen I thought the first part was harmonically a little too much for me to take in all at once if its purpose was to teach me the harmonic vocabulary of the piece. But listening to the rest you still had a few interesting surprises up your sleve that I found interesting in a positive way. And on the second listen I was comfortable with the first part as well.

I also felt more oriented in terms of what mood you are going for at any given time. So for me it's a much more satisfying "harmonic story" to listen to. The one thing I'm not so sure about is that you're starting the piece with a very high-energy part and then follow it up with a fairly long quiter part. On first listen that had me wondering for a while "Ok, are we gonna get "back into action" in the next part? No? Maybe the next one?". To me that felt like a less natural development than the rest of the piece. Maybe someone more experienced can tell you if it would be a good idea to either swap two parts around to start with a lower intensity version of your main melody or make slight changes to the first part to make the contrast between the first and second part less strong. But if for some reason you wanted that strong contrast there or it makes sense for the internal story you had in your head for what this piece is about, then that's fine too.

Overall I think this is very fine work and you're moving in the right direction. Keep doing what you're doing!

 

@Bjarle Tan it is an interesting composition. It brought to mind scenes of China that I have seen in movies. I don't have any specific suggestions for you. I do not play piano, and I have never studied the piano repertoire enough. I can say that it sounds more as if you were writing for other instruments, not the piano, if that makes any sense.