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The Steeple of Spindrift | Orchestral track

Discussion in 'Critique & Feedback' started by Kaan Akalin, Oct 9, 2018.

  1. Hi!

    Just joined redbanned and see some familiar faces (hi!) from vi-c. :)

    Very open to some no-holds-barred feedback on this piece. Any aspect you can think of. Eager to get better from your combined wisdom. Thanks so much!

     
  2. Hey! I really really like the overall vibe of the piece but the complex harmony makes it very difficult to lock in with the melody and the form. Also I don't know the context and maybe it's the whole point but this is challenging your audience almost all the time. I think you could benefit to contrast with some clearer consonance.
     
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  3. #3 Kaan Akalin, Oct 10, 2018
    Last edited: Oct 10, 2018
    Thanks for your feedback, Mattia! I think it's still tricky for me to gauge what will and what won't challenge the audience. I probably need more practise with recognizable forms. I still have a lot of MV's videos to go through.

    For this song, would you suggest thinning out or simplifying the harmony at times? Are there any specific moments or transitions that I should address?

    Thanks!
     

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